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Nowadays, more and more people are having consumer goods like refrigerators and washing machines. Does this development bring more advantages than disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Due to
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 the advancement of technology, these days everyone has basic amenities like fridges and washing machines. I believe
this
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 trend has more positive outcomes than negatives
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 it saves people a lot of
time
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 and energy
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 they can
utilize
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utilise
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 for something else.
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 with, because of technology,appliances like cool storage and washing appliances assist individuals to work easily. It is a convenient way ,especially for working people who have less
time
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 for household
chores
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chores,
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 as it requires less
time
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 to complete the task and they can concentrate on their professional life. Not only
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this
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it is
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is it
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 easy to use by children
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 when their parents are not at home.
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,
As
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 in the past, they have to wash their clothes by hand
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 takes a lot of
time
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 and effort. But now these days it is easy to do
this
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 task without wasting
time
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.
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 the increase in technological devices makes people's
life
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 easy
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,
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it has some drawbacks
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.
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 devices are harmful to the environment. Because refrigerators emit greenhouse gases
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 eventually increase global temperature and are
consequently
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 dangerous for human beings
as well as
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 animals.
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,
It
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it
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 is noticed that in recent years more and more buying electronic devices like refrigerators and washing machines. which results in global warming and leads to the depletion of glaciers.
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, it is undoubtedly that technology helps to make life easy.
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, it has bad impacts on nature as it increases the
overall
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 temperature on
earth
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 and leads to global warming.

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task response
Make a clear plan before you write. Put a strong view in the first line and end with a short sum up.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas with small words like and, but, so, also. Use full stops to end each idea; this helps the flow.
task response
The essay shows a clear view that the good points may be more than the bad.
coherence
There is a balance of idea about plus and minus.
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