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Government should spend more money on education or sports and recreation .Do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #education #sports #recreation
culture and athletics play a crucial role in our society since the generation who is more educated and practical in
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 can turn the history of their provincial so I strongly believe that government should allocate more money to those spheres. To start with, the only weapon to fight injustice is
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 it means that if we have more educated youngsters in our society there will be a reduction in the number of crimes because they will instinctively know that committing crimes has consequences
such
 as jail, less reliable friends and parents who constantly think that they failed in bringing up their kids. Another reason for supporting
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 idea is having more healthy teenagers as they are the ones who are able to make our
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 well-known around the world.
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, triple GGG a professional boxer has made a noticeable contribution to the popularity of our agrarian. He has been performing and beating his opponents in the USA
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 he has been always representing our flag and traditional clothes which
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 fans from different continents being interested in our culture and history.
On the other hand
, if we pay more attention to only these two factors other spheres may suffer
such
 as art, history or music and it would lead to undevelopment of them
however
, it does not require as much financial support as fun or literacy
due to
 facilities. In fact, the number of people involved in sports is much more
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 than all those three spheres combined together. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that culture and athletics need more financial support and special care by the government
due to
 the large number of teenagers being enthused by them and it
also
 has a positive impact on the country's development
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