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The world's most urgent problem is caused by over-population. Do you agree or disagree?

#world #over-population
The chart provides a visual representation of the number of teaching
hours
 consumed by the
tutors
 in three different
schools
 primary, lower secondary and upper secondary, in four different countries Japan, Spain, Iceland and the
USA
 in 2001.
Overall
, the
USA
 had the highest
hours
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 consumed mostly in upper secondary and moderately in lower secondary,
while
 Japan was the lowest
hours
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number of hours
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 spent by
tutors
 in upper secondary. Looking at the graph, we clearly see that 1200
hours
 had consumed by lecturers in upper secondary in
a
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USA schools
a USA school
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USA
schools
 in 2001.
This
 was 200
hours
 higher than the
hours
 spent in lower secondary
USA
schools
 over the same year(1000).
Also
, 700
hours
 were consumed in primary school in the
USA
. In Iceland and Spain,
tutors
 approximately spent the same
hours
 in upper secondary school(900).
This
 was approximately 300
hours
 higher than the
times
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time
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 that
tutors
 spent in lower secondary and primary
schools
 in Iceland(600).
On the other hand
, Japan has the least number of
hours
by
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of
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 education in the upper secondary (700).
Also
, educators consumed moderate
hours
 in lower secondary(650), and ,
finally
 600
hours
 used in the primary in 2001.
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