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The world's most urgent problem is caused by over-population. Do you agree or disagree?

The chart provides a visual representation of the number of teaching
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 consumed by the
tutors
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 in three different
schools
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 primary, lower secondary and upper secondary, in four different countries Japan, Spain, Iceland and the
USA
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 in 2001.
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, the
USA
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 had the highest
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hours
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 consumed mostly in upper secondary and moderately in lower secondary,
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 Japan was the lowest
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hours
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 spent by
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 in upper secondary. Looking at the graph, we clearly see that 1200
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 had consumed by lecturers in upper secondary in
a
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USA schools
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USA
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schools
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 in 2001.
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 was 200
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 higher than the
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 spent in lower secondary
USA
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schools
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 over the same year(1000).
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, 700
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 were consumed in primary school in the
USA
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. In Iceland and Spain,
tutors
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 approximately spent the same
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 in upper secondary school(900).
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 was approximately 300
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 higher than the
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 that
tutors
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 spent in lower secondary and primary
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 in Iceland(600).
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, Japan has the least number of
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 education in the upper secondary (700).
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, educators consumed moderate
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 in lower secondary(650), and ,
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 600
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 used in the primary in 2001.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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