The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows how fizzy drinks are manufactured.
Overall
, the process can be divided into 5 stages, starting with water
preparation, evaporation and carbonation, mixing, filtering and filling to the last
process of distribution.
Firstly
, raw water
will be filtered before going into water
softening machines and being processed with chemicals in the initial cleaning stage. Secondly
, after the preparation is done, the cleaned water
will be pumped into electric heaters to begin
the heating evaporation and carbonation process. Then
, it passes through a cooling pipe to get carbonated with a particular gas called carbon dioxide, before being sent to the mixing tank.
Once the water
is filled in the tank, stage 3 begins. Water
will be added with combinations of colouring substances, syrup, and flavour in order to make a specific taste. Consequently
, in stage 4, the mixed water
will be filtered again in order to be filled into bottles and cans. Finally
, the packages are packed into boxes before being delivered to different supermarkets by trucks.Submitted by pimchanok.npt on
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