The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows how fizzy drinks are manufactured.
Overall
, the process can be divided into 5 stages, starting with
water
preparation, evaporation and carbonation, mixing, filtering and filling to the
last
process of distribution.
Firstly
, raw
water
will be filtered before going into
water
softening machines and being processed with chemicals in the initial cleaning stage.
Secondly
, after the preparation is done, the cleaned
water
will be pumped into electric heaters
to begin
the heating evaporation and carbonation process.
Then
, it passes through a cooling pipe to get carbonated with a particular gas called carbon dioxide, before being sent to the mixing tank. Once the
water
is filled in the tank, stage 3 begins.
Water
will be added with combinations of colouring substances, syrup, and flavour in order to make a specific taste.
Consequently
, in stage 4, the mixed
water
will be filtered again in order to be filled into bottles and cans.
Finally
, the packages are packed into boxes before being delivered to different supermarkets by trucks.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Filtration
  • Water softening
  • Chemical treatment
  • Evaporation
  • Cooling pipe
  • Carbonation
  • Carbon dioxide
  • High pressure
  • Syrup
  • Flavor
  • Color
  • Stirring
  • Uniformity
  • Secondary filtration
  • Bottling
  • Canning
  • Packaging
  • Distribution
  • Retail outlets
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