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These days many kids spend a lot of their time playing computer games instead of doing sports. What is the cause of this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Today, with the advent of technology,
computers
 have become an integral part of human life. These
days
kids
 are exposed to
computers
 at an early age which has resulted in spending less
time
into
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 physical and outdoor activities. Nowadays parents and working professionals,have as limited
time
 as
it
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 used to
be
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in an earlier generation to spend with their
kids
, friends and family which has resulted in exposure to computer
games
 right from a young age. The parents find it convenient for their
kids
 to give them access to
computers
 and the
kids
also
 like spending
time
 on computer
games
. In the early
days
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day's
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kids
 used to meet each other and have some physical and outdoor activities but
within
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 today’s
world
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 every outdoor activity is now replaced with its virtual form,
kids
 these
days
 prefer to play FIFA or football
games
 on their
computers
 and gaming stations rather playing it on the field. Today, the gaming industry is one of the fastest-growing industries
due to
 its high demand.
On the other hand
,
kids
 these
days
 are reluctant to go out and mix with fellow members from their neighbourhood.
This
 has resulted in fewer human interactions
,
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 and affects physical and mental health, continuous screen
time
also
 affects children eyesight’s and
kids
 these
days
 are getting eyeglasses at a young age.
To conclude
, the negative aspects of
kids
 playing computer
games
 overpower the positive ones.
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