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In many nations, people in huge cities either live alone or in small family units, instead of in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

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People in megacities have been developing a tendency of living independently or in small family units recently, rather than in extended families. In my own perspective, I believe that development comprises a more range of positive changes than negative effects. Many today believe that living in a small household can enhance the relationship state between family members.
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 type of family usually comprises just two groups of
parents
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 and
children
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 without support from the elderly, and by having more time together, the relationship between
parents
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 and
children
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 would become more stable. Not only can the
parents
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 be more responsible for their kids
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 of depending on the older generations, but the
children
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 can receive most of the love and share from their
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. Unlike small family units or single-parent and extended ones have to deal with more conflicts because of the generation gap, particularly the differences in perspectives between generations or the lack of sympathy.
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, the most affected person from these conflicts are the
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 because of the negative effects, and it
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 influences relationships. What is more,
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 some prefer to live
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in
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 a nuclear family or single-parent households, others are
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 likely to live alone, especially youngsters.
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 living alone can be full of loneliness for some, society has developed numerous nursery centres with modern equipment to look after the elderly, and owning a pet can
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 be a solution for loneliness.
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, with the observation that many previous generations have to work a nine-to-five life and carry a huge financial burden
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 responsibilities for their families, many youths share a trend of living independently without engagement.
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, living alone would give youngsters plenty of opportunities to have more time for self-care
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 self-growth and it can benefit the population by reducing the number of newborns.
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, I trust that living in a small household can improve the relationship between
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 and
children
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 without serious conflicts in the generation gap as the extended family, or even living alone can
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 be a positive choice for youngsters to spend more quality time for themselves and
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 the far meaning behind it of delaying the growing population.
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