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The planet's population is reaching unsustainable levels, and people are facing shortage of resources like water, food and fuel. To what consequences may overpopulation lead? In your opinion, what measures can be taken to fight overpopulation?

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In recent years, the Earth has been facing a harsh condition of
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 which has detrimental effects on all aspects of humans. Improved medical facilities, well-being, and lack of family planning are a few causes of
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. What could lead to
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, and what
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 should be taken to prevent it for the sake of citizens and mother Earth? I will discuss
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overpopulation
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 can cause natural resources like food and fuel scarcity. When it comes to lack of resources, starvation, malnutrition, and other possible diseases become more likely to occur. Human themselves causes environmental damage by cutting down forests, hunting animals, planting litter, causing pollution and many more.
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, people living in impoverished areas with limited access might face water shortages.
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, those who rule the influential position could stop it by taking strict action. Let’s take China as an example; the Government put a ‘one-child’ policy that curbed population growth.
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, China has become one of the most prosperous countries in implementing the nation’s family planning program. To summarize,
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 of the Earth is one of the crucial
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 of the world, which lead to
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depletion and reason of
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 suffering.
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, governmental action and policy towards
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 issue can be a huge help to suppress
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 problem.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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