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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

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Nowadays, in many parts of the
world
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 many people are interested to know the
history
 of the
house
 or the building where they live in. There are many reasons that can lead people to investigate the
history
 of their
house
 and in
this
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 I will try to explain them. In my opinion, principally, people want to know about the origins and the
history
 of their
house
 for two reasons:
firstly
, they want to know from whom and how their
house
 was constructed, what kind of use has been made of it,
thus
 simply to satisfy their curiosity.
Secondly
, knowing the past of their home and its
owners
 and the neighbourhood could help them feel safer and more at ease in daily life. The first way to discover the past of your home is to talk to the residents who have lived in that neighbourhood the longest. In
this
way
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 you can know what happened and what usually happens in that zone. Another way to know something about the
house
 and its
owners
 is surf to
internet
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 to eventually discover news about the neighbourhood and what happens in it. With these two ways to acquire information, the new
owners
 can easily reach their goals. In conclusion, the desire to know the
history
 of your own
house
 is always more important for the new
owners
 and
this
 trend is growing up in the world and its importance is linked with security and curiosity and
according to
me
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 it is very important to know
this
history
.
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