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These days people in some countries are living in a “throwaway” society which means people use things in a short time then throw them away. What are its causes and what impacts can it have? 

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Modern day
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 society is mired in a notion, known as "throwaway" customer culture.
This
 culture is based upon the idea that
things
 we are buying are
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 and we don't even need them to be usable for a long time. In
this
way
 of social consciousness people
are
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tend to see
disposadle
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disposable
things
 to be more practical than reusable.
Such
 a
way
 of thinking causes people to choose short-term pleasures
instead
 of long-term ones. And buying
things
 is obviously a good
way
 to cheer yourself up.
For example
 - buying prepared food in
supermarket
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 saves
your
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 time and gives you an opportunity to choose any meal you want every time. It
sound
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 more comfortable than cooking for yourself and being limited with the products you have in your
frige
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fridge
, but it's barely cheaper or healthier.
Moreover
, it
produses
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produces
 much more trash. Speaking about trash, throwaway society seems to be the main reason for the level of waste to
increas
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increase
 more and more every year.
As
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the
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apply
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instance - one-off electronic cigarettes. I, personally, see
this people
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 with
dispoasdle
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disposable
 vapes all over, and it's scary to even imagine how much
plastics
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plastic
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 and electronics
is
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 thrown away
everyday
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. It is worth mentioning, that plastics and electronics (especially batteries) are very pollutive
things
 to be just thrown in a trash bin, they need to be recycled in a special
way
. To
concude
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conclude
, a "throwaway" customer culture, caused by a sharp rise in
a
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 standard of living, is very offensive
for
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to
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 ecology. It's
also
 no good for society as we value
things
 less, because of living with the thought that you can always buy a new one.
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