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In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computer, the internet and smartphone, more and more people are to starting to work from home. What are the advantage and disadvantages of this development.

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Working from
home
 is becoming more common among many people
due to
 the rise in the utilization of computers, the internet and smartphones
whereas
 in previous years most
persons
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 had to go to their job locations in order to
work
.
This
 change has
it's
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 associated effects which
spans
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 through the social, economic and health aspects of
the
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society.
This
 essay will be addressing the benefits and drawbacks of working remotely. Among the numerous positive advantages of remote working is the reduction of cost for both employer and employee.
This
 is demonstrated in the reduction of space and amount of
equipments
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equipment
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 required by the employer in business
operation
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operations
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 and the worker will save
cost
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 by spending less on transportation.
In addition
, people who
work
 from
home
 have less exposure to occupational hazards as they are not always at the
work
 site.
Furthermore
,
work
 time flexibility is greatly enhanced by working from
home
.
On the other hand
, one of the disadvantages of
this
 recent development is the lack of proper supervision of the staff. With the physical absence of superiors, members of staff may neglect their duties
while
 working from
home
.
Also
, the building of office interpersonal relationships
are
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 negatively affected by the
work
-from-
home
 style of
work
. In summary, working from
home
 has more benefits than drawbacks and these disadvantages may be curtailed if proper checks are put in place.
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