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Should Government funding be spent on education and health care systems? What is your opinion?

#government #education #health #care #systems
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Every
government
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 has a budget for the whole year the
state
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 decides its priorities and spends on different sectors.
Government
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 should spend a good chunk of its funds serving the basic needs of the public like
education
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 and
health
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care
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.In my ,opinion
Government
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 funding must be spent on
education
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 and
health
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care
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this
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 is crucial for the human development of the
state
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. The
state
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 should take
care
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 of their
people
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's basic needs to ensure the
people
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 their
government
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 is behind them.If the
state
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 does not spend on
education
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, the Rich can go to private institutes but what will happen if someone can't afford
education
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 and
health
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? The gap between rich and poor will increase because the poor with not have the same set of opportunities as rich
people
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 can afford private
education
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 but the poor can't.Illiteracy will increase in a society that's not good for the
state
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.
Health
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care
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 is the basic necessity of every individual in the
state
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 the
government
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's responsibility is to provide the best quality
health
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care
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.if someone is diagnosed with a major disease and can't afford expensive treatment so the
state
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 should take
care
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 of him,
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 everyone pays the tax that's why
people
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 pay taxes because the
state
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 will be there for them in tough times.now states time to return the benefits of tax in helping them fund
health
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care
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.
To sum up
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,
Health
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 and
education
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 are the basic pillars of the human development index.every
government
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 wants to develop its human capital so investing in the public is never a bad idea these funds are coming from them are being spent on their
health
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 and
education
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