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Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a ‘fat tax’ is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a ‘fat tax’ is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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The scope of the positivity of the pros of healthy eating outweighs the cons. I believe that the government should levy unhealthy foods. A
tax
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 on junk
food
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 will force
people
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 to make healthier choices. A healthier population will benefit
society
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.
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, some members of
society
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 will feel discriminated against. A
tax
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 on unhealthy
food
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 will more than likely cause a person to choose healthier alternatives that are less expensive.
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, a person may want to eat chips but if they see that the price is more than a bowl of vegetables
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 they will be more inclined to purchase the more nutritious
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.
People
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 will
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 become healthier and have fewer health problems. Many physical and mental diseases will decrease resulting in an
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 better mood and happier lifestyle. A healthier general population will benefit
society
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. As more
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 will have fewer diseases
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 less
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 money has to be spent to improve an individual’s health.
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, hospitals that are overcrowded may have a significant drop in the number of
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 that visit them and
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 there will be more time and resources to help the extremely ill.
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, mental illness will
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 improve which can lead to higher productivity and reduced sick days being taken by a worker. Unfortunately, the part of the public that enjoys unhealthy
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 will find a fat
tax
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 unfair. Members of a
society
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 may feel discriminated against and feel that
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 a duty is not required. To illustrate, an individual will find that paying more money for less healthy conscience
food
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 will allow them to have less capital to pay for bills,
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 as the internet or heating.
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, it will benefit their
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 health in the long run. To summarize, a fat
tax
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 will direct an individual towards better eating habits. A person that eats healthier will feel better about themselves and
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 can have a direct correlation with higher productivity. Ergo, the government should
tax
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 unhealthy
food
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.
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