Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? (IELTS 2, AC)
It is undeniable that entertainment is important for more
people
Use synonyms
such
as making us feel relaxed by singing or acting. The entertainers get too much income than others to cause some Linking Words
people
don’t agree, Use synonyms
while
others suggest Linking Words
otherwise
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This
will be examined in the following essay.
Nowadays, the entertainment media be improving rapidly to make Linking Words
people
pay attention and make everyone happy. Use synonyms
Moreover
, entertainers’ salary is higher than other jobs because of other factors. Linking Words
For example
, musicians must have a lot of costs Linking Words
firstly
spending money Linking Words
such
as hiring a composer, music practice room, making a music video, and so on. It can be seen that before getting one song, they must spend a lot of expend and have several stages of the music production process. Linking Words
In addition
, those jobs have a high risk because there is an opportunity for the audience will take an interest in other entertainers . Linking Words
Thus
, they try hard to make a reputation.
Another type of job that should be highly paid is environmentalist. Most Linking Words
people
don’t pay attention to the environment Use synonyms
that is
destroyed every day, they reasoned that it’s distant. The environment is essential to living Linking Words
such
as bringing wood to build a house, herbs can be used to make medicine and so on. Linking Words
In contrast
, environmentalists work hard to protect those but receive low salaries. Increasing environmentalists’ salaries can encourage to some Linking Words
people
want to do Use synonyms
this
work and more realization the problem.
In conclusion, some Linking Words
people
argue that entertainers are paid too much money is inappropriate. In my opinion, they had spent a lot of money and time before getting one result, Use synonyms
therefore
, getting a high salary is a suitable reward for them.Linking Words
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