Some people encourage young children to leave their parents house as soon as they become adults while others say children should stay at their parent's house as long as possible. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.
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childhood
child
, adult, seniours, Replace the word
childhood
old
each Correct word choice
and old
stages
has Change to a singular noun
stage
their
own importance and role in Correct pronoun usage
its
life
. However
, As child
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children
grown
up people think to encourage them to go out and live their Wrong verb form
grow
life
at
their own beside their Change preposition
on
parants
or some say should live with their Correct your spelling
parents
parants
. Correct your spelling
parents
let
discuss Add a missing verb
let's
the
both points of view and Remove the article
apply
conclued
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concluded
conclude
to
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with
the
reasonable statement.
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a
benifits
of Correct your spelling
benefits
parants
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parents
to live
with them Change the verb form
living
such
as
children can save their money for rent and other living Change preposition
that
expences
, Correct your spelling
expenses
although
they will get money from their parants
to help them in Correct your spelling
parents
further
study in collage
or university. Correct your spelling
college
Moreover
, adults can get a
better Correct article usage
apply
advise
from their Replace the word
advice
parants
because they know them Correct your spelling
parents
and
better and they have their Correct word choice
apply
life
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. Correct your spelling
experience
experiences
For example
, if any kid is stuck in to choose
a better Change the verb form
choosing
carrier
their Correct your spelling
career
parants
are first who can guide themCorrect your spelling
parents
a
better option.
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to a
However
, If the a
young kid Choose an article
the
a
go
out to choose Change the verb form
goes
a
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apply
life
according to
their own by
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apply
financialy
or Correct your spelling
financially
financial
emotionaly
it is Correct your spelling
emotionally
emotional
a
better for them to experience the world Change the article
apply
by
their own and learn at their own pace. To Change preposition
on
examplify
, if a youngster go out to the world and face Correct your spelling
exemplify
them
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it
their
own and learn Change preposition
on their
lesson
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lessons
their
own makes them more confident and expert in their Change preposition
on their
life
.
To conclued
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conclude
the
both Remove the article
apply
statments
, young children are best suitable with their Correct your spelling
statements
parants
by Correct your spelling
parents
that
they are always Correct pronoun usage
apply
in
supervision and take Change preposition
under
their
better care Correct pronoun usage
apply
from
the Change preposition
of
socities
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society
faulters
. Correct your spelling
falters
whereas
, leaving out from
home Change preposition
apply
is
hard for them to live and Verb problem
makes it
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apply
along
make their Change preposition
apply
carrier
.Correct your spelling
careers
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