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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some
people
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 assert that governments should raise the
tax
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 on fast
food
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 because eating
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food
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 too
much
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 leads to
health
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 problems. There are two reasons to support
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 idea:
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,
this
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 action will discourage
people
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 to have unhealthy
food
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 and
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, governments will be able to allocate amounts of money to
health
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 care. First of all, we must recognize that
people
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 tend to eat fast
food
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 too much because
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food
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 is more economical than healthy
food
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.
This
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 can include French fries and hamburgers. By way of an example, young
people
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 who are indifferent to their
health
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 condition, are likely to eat too much fast
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.
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 an article in the Asahi Shimbun newspaper published
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 month, 60% of young
people
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 as university students in Japan regularly purchase unhealthy
food
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 ,especially from MacDonald’s rather than better-quality cuisine.
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, they easily suffer from diseases
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 as not only diabetes but
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 cancer.
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, governments can invest more money in
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 care. In fact, research recently conducted by the university of Tokyo discovered that the government in Japan can spend 6 billion dollars more a year on improving the
health
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 conditions of their citizens if the rate of
tax
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 on fast
food
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 increases
15
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% from 10%.
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, the Ministry of
Health
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 in Japan is now considering
to impose
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 a higher
tax
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 on
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food
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 to improve the
health
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 condition of their citizens. In conclusion, there are significant advantages to rising the
tax
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 on fast
food
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 higher
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 as preventing
people
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 from eating unhealthy
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 and spending more funds on
health
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 care. We must consider these benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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