You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. In some parts of the world people try to find out one's own family history. Why do people do this? Do you think it is a positive or negative? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Certain
people
in worldwide
area
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consider
to identify
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their own family's
history
. My reason why some individuals tend to take an action on
this
journey and I think
this
could bring about
optimistic
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results to
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race will be elaborated in
this
essay.
To begin
with,
family's
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family
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history
might play a crucial role in someone's
live
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life
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, seeing a revolution of your own genetic might help them to find
purposes
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in life in
someway
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some way
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.
For example
, some
people
probably lose their parents during the World War and over time, it is time to explore and research
about
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your family
due to
this
day and age that we have various
technology
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advancements
could
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that could
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solve
this
problem easily.
Therefore
, many
people
nowadays
ambitious
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more
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to figure out about their past.
Moreover
, I strongly believe that searching for your own
history
is bring positive
consequesces
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consequences
into
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to
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people
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people's
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life because it
is not only fulfil
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does not only fulfil
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your feeling but
also
help you to find the right goals in your
life time
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lifetime
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. Take a tennis player
for instance
; studies
shown
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that most
of
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the
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famous tennis
player
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players
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become successful because
their
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family support in terms of physical and mental. To simply explain, knowing that your grandfather used to be the
champainship
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championship
will be a prime inspiration for
young
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generation. From
this
perspective,
ability
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of your own family might affect
who
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you will become in the future which will not bring any pessimistic outcomes to do so. In conclusion,
although
it is undeniable that searching for your own
history
might
represented
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in
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the
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strange way for somebody, I am of the opinion that you can reap benefits from it by finding your
past
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part
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of
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family
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the family
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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