Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are some who think that
people
on
their childhood ought to require to do Change preposition
in
community
work without profit on
their free time. Change preposition
in
This
could bring advantages to teenagers also
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and also
for
the Change preposition
to
community
. I believe and agree that having young people
in the Correct your spelling
workforce
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workforce
work force
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workforce
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an early
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an early
the early
early
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an early
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it
could bring many advantages for them and the Correct pronoun usage
apply
community
.
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giving
people
to be part of the workforce at early
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the early
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brings Correct pronoun usage
apply
many
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much
positiveness
for their future helping them to develop skills and find a passion, Change to a plural noun
positivenesses
for example
having programs in which they could develop soft skills like carpentry or landscaping. They not only will help the community
as well they help themself to find their passions. in addition
, because it is not under any economic interest it becomes even more interested
.
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interesting
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,Secondly
community
will be indirectly benefited as well the
local council. because they will be receiving totally free Change preposition
as the
labourer
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labourers
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example
if you have apprentices totally free in the building Add the comma(s)
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are
it could reduce the budget Unnecessary verb
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employees that could be used in Change preposition
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another sectors
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another sector
other sectors
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as,
education or developing infrastructure like hospitals or roads. In Remove the comma
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having
people
working they
will not have time to expend on the street doing vandalism.
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is they
To conclude
, both, young people
and the community
will be
benefit from having unpaid work. Unnecessary verb
apply
Further
more young people
will find their passions and develop useful skills and the community
will have a broad budget to spend in different areas.Submitted by gonzalofuentesvg on
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