The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the
number
of
enquires
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enquiries
show examples
recevied
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received
by the Tourist Information Office over a six-month period in 2011. There are three
enquery
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enquiry
methods, in
person
, by
letter
/
email
and by
telephone
.
Overall
, during
this
six-month period,
in
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in-person
show examples
person
and
by
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by-telephone
show examples
telephone
enquiries
had a big growth.
By contrast
,
number
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a number
the number
show examples
of
enqueries
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enquiries
by
letter
or
email
had a
slightly
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slight
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drop. Until Jun 2011, there are 4 times more users
choose
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who choose
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in
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in-person
show examples
person
enquery
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enquiry
and
by
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apply
show examples
telephone
enquery
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enquiry
than
by
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apply
show examples
letter
/
email
. Looking at the details. In Jan 2011,
telephone
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the telephone
a telephone
show examples
is the most popular way to
enquery
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enquiry
,
number
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the number
show examples
of by
letter
/
email
enquiries
is not significantly different from
telephone
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the telephone
a telephone
show examples
. And the
number
of
in
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in-person
show examples
person
enquiries
is the lowest, around 400. But, dramatically, the
number
of
in
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in-person
show examples
person
enquiries
is
rapidly
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rapid
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growth in after six
month
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months
show examples
. Until Jun 2011, it began the biggest
enquiries
source.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, enquery, person, letter, email, telephone, enquiries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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