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Some believed in many countries, the investment of public in arts can be justified. Others thinks that government should spend more on health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, many
people
 argue that it is vital for them to develop their lives in personal and professional circumstances. From my point of view, there are more benefits that bring for
people
 than their disadvantages. On the one hand, many believe that taking
risks
 can make them face emotional damage. To be more precise, providing that
people
 are at risk and have failed, they could be frustrated and depressed with their unsuccess, which leads to awful consequences.
Moreover
,
people
 are at risk without consideration and uncertainty can make them go into bad situations in life. To illustrate,
people
 who make decisions prematurely could not be successful and seize the opportunity correctly in their jobs. On the flip side of the coin,
people
 argue that taking
risks
 can open the door to improving themselves and their success. For one thing, taking
risks
 helps
people
 have a large amount of chance to make an attempt in many kinds of fields.
Therefore
, they can widen their knowledge, improve their skill life to be appropriate to society's needs, and become successful.
In addition
,
risks
 are the thing that makes
people
 being aware of their lack of skill and develops it.
For instance
, pupils who are independent of their parents, need to learn how to cook well to serve themselves without others. In conclusion,
although
 taking
risks
 might make
people
's lives and careers go into problems, I strongly believe that it could affect their lives in a positive way if
people
 could consider
risks
 thoroughly.
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