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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion. You should write at least 250 words.

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It is observed that
although
 some countries build high-quality
of
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sports
facilities
, many public cannot
use
 there, because it is built only for
athletes
. In my opinion,
this
 trend will have a negative impact.
To begin
 with, there are several positive aspects.
Firstly
, many sportsmen should more focus on their training. Special
facilities
 can provide
athletes
 with high-quality
of
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equipment and professional curriculums. It can help them to more concentrate on their training.
Secondly
, the
sports
 industry can be grown up. If the governments invest money in
sports
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 industry, the number of
athletes
 can increase. A lot of
athletes
 can produce good results
such
 as winning competitions with other countries. It is the best way to develop the
sports
 industry.
On the other hand
, reasons why it is a negative development. First of all, the public cannot
use
 high-quality
of
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sports
facilities
. Many people in modern society have diseases
such
 as obesity, heart
diseases
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 and so on. If they do exercise frequently, they can improve their health. So high-quality
of
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sports
facilities
is
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 important for the public.
In addition
, some people who prefer doing exercise can have complaints. A lot of people who like
sports
 want to go
high-quality
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sports
facilities
. If they cannot
use
 it there, they will have complaints. It has a negative effect on
sports
facilities
. In conclusion, in my opinion, the negative aspects are stronger than the positive development.
Thus
, the governments encourage
public
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 to
use
sports
facilities
.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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