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Some people are happy to stay in the same area for their whole life, while others prefer living in many different places. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #area #life #places
In a community, there are citizens who prefer not to travel
while
 in ,contrast some folk want to explore other parts of the world.
This
 essay strongly supports the latter but it will
also
 try to find the reasons and formulate both points. There could be multiple reasons for
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the crowd
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crowd
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crowds
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 to travel around the world but quite very few points to cover for participants of a
society
 who want to stay in their native country. The main reasons behind
this
 could be any of the following, parents, assets under management which
requires
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 constant care, business, or lack of education. Clearly, things are starting to change with the advancement in technology and the introduction of data to
society
 is a game changer as it is solving a lot of problems for the knowledge sector or the corporate world, It indirectly makes
population
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 free of their choices and it's the ethics they follow that sometimes become a barrier to them by not allowing them to leave their loved ones and shift to
other residence
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another residence
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. I think that
society
 nowadays
have
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 access to everything via phones and data, which is giving them a stage to learn new skills
while
 staying in touch with their loved ones and following their family heritage. Travelling, allows
public
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the public
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 to explore
new
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the new
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 zone and get know-how about other heritages and help them by making them educated not just about technicalities but
also
 about other citizens who live in the
society
. I think it's the best way to learn about new
region
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regions
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 in any country and learn new techniques to move forward in life.
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