These days people prefer to watch live performances (shows, concerts) through tv or computer, online rather than go to the place of that event. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today many people prefer

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watch

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live shows and concerts at home on

or computer

instead

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it in reality. I agree that

mostly

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people watch content at home and

i'm

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going to explain that in my essay.

First

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reason is that it

comfortable

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individual

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individuals

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because a lot of people can't go to concerts in real life

due to

that many of that events going

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on in

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other cities or countries.

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sometimes even if that event happens in local area tickets

usually

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expensive and

number

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of them

are

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really small so the only way to watch

show

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the show

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is only by

or computer. In my city

for example

when popular artists like Kairat Nurtas,

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are making

a concert tickets

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usually sells quickly and you need to watch at home.

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reason is cost many individuals can't afford

such

expenses and because of

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they need to watch it on

. Prices are big usually and especially for

stars

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show

however

prices can even double or triple if

concert

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will be soon.

This

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of course

understandable

due to

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place

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for

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event

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or other needs of

show

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the show

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. I

belive

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believe

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that many individuals get through

this

experience in their

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own

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life so they know what

i'm

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talking about.In

conclusion

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I can say that because of reasons that I already noticed in paragraphs above like cost and comfort watching shows on

or computer is

common

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a common

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thing in our world today and I

belive

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believe

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that

this

trend will continue in future decades.

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Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
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Topic Vocabulary:

live performance
streaming
mobility issues
busy schedules
substantially cheaper
broadens cultural horizons
customize their environment
electric atmosphere
social interaction
technical issues
immersive experience

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These days people prefer to watch live performances (shows, concerts) through tv or computer, online rather than go to the place of that event. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The tv and the internet provide opportunity to ordinary people to become famous.Is this a positive or a negative development?

Many people today are worried about the large quantities of waste produced by ordinary households. What problems are caused by household waste, and what solutions may be possible in both the short and the long term?

It has become very common for people to borrow money. Most people have a Credit Card, a mortgage and often they will buy a car on credit as well. Is this a good idea is it too risky? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

At the present, the population of some countires includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that visiting museums and art galleries is the best way to learn about art, While others believe that there are betteer ways of doing that. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.