These days people prefer to watch live performances (shows, concerts) through tv or computer, online rather than go to the place of that event. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Today many people prefer
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to watch
watch
live shows and concerts at home on Change the form of the verb
watching
tv
or computer instead
of do
it in reality. I agree that Change the verb form
doing
mostly
people watch content at home and Replace the word
most
i'm
going to explain that in my essay.Change the capitalization
I'm
First
reason is that it Add an article
The first
comfortable
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is comfortable
to
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for
individual
because a lot of people can't go to concerts in real life Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
due to
that many of that events going in
other cities or countries. Change preposition
on in
Also
sometimes even if that event happens in local area tickets usually
expensive and Add a missing verb
are usually
number
of them Change the article
a number
the number
are
really small so the only way to watch Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show
is only by Add an article
the show
a show
tv
or computer. In my city for example
when popular artists like Kairat Nurtas,Dimash
are making Correct word choice
and Dimash
a concert tickets
usually sells quickly and you need to watch at home.Correct the article-noun agreement
concert tickets
a concert ticket
Second
reason is cost many individuals can't afford Add an article
The second
such
expenses and because of that
they need to watch it on Add a comma
,that
tv
. Prices are big usually and especially for stars
show Fix the agreement mistake
star
however
prices can even double or triple if concert
will be soon. Add an article
the concert
This
is ofcourse
understandable Correct your spelling
of course
due to
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of Correct article usage
the rent
place
for Correct article usage
the place
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an event
event
or other needs of Fix the agreement mistake
events
show
. I Add an article
the show
belive
that many individuals get through Correct your spelling
believe
this
experience in their on
life so they know what Correct your spelling
own
i'm
talking about.In Change the capitalization
I'm
conclusion
I can say that because of reasons that I already noticed in paragraphs above like cost and comfort watching shows on Add a comma
,conclusion
tv
or computer is common
thing in our world today and I Add an article
a common
the common
belive
that Correct your spelling
believe
this
trend will continue in future decades.Submitted by Abdu.abetayev on
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion