These days people prefer to watch live performances (shows, concerts) through tv or computer, online rather than go to the place of that event. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today many people prefer

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watch

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live shows and concerts at home on

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it in reality. I agree that

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people watch content at home and

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going to explain that in my essay.

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reason is that it

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individual

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because a lot of people can't go to concerts in real life

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other cities or countries.

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sometimes even if that event happens in local area tickets

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expensive and

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of them

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really small so the only way to watch

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is only by

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when popular artists like Kairat Nurtas,

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are making

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usually sells quickly and you need to watch at home.

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reason is cost many individuals can't afford

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they need to watch it on

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show

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will be soon.

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event

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or other needs of

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that many individuals get through

this

experience in their

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life so they know what

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talking about.In

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I can say that because of reasons that I already noticed in paragraphs above like cost and comfort watching shows on

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thing in our world today and I

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that

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trend will continue in future decades.

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