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Some think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Needless to say, fossil fuel is one of the biggest pollutants that emitted greenhouse gases and cause widespread environmental problems,
although
, increasing the cost of fuels might be one of the small solutions, but, it should not be the only option,
then
 I do not agree with
this
 claim.
Firstly
, before offering a suggestion, we must deeply think about the consequences. Rising the prices can precisely cause people's dissatisfaction in society and
this
 feeling immediately turn to protests, strikes, vandalism, etc, and the outcome is going to be social disorder.
On the other hand
,
this
 is undeniable that human always prefers the easiest way to answer to his/her needs, depends on
this
 statement, the government should put some different hurdles in their way of easement and decrease the demands
instead
 of eliminating them,
such
 as, limit the number of gas stations among the city zone,
as well as
, produce fuel based vehicles.
Secondly
, if you ask for more money from folks, it is going to make the unstable economy and
also
 will damage the economical circle,
therefore
 inflation
comes
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 a pressing problem, which is really hard to deal with, Admittedly it is smart if governors and politicians have alternative choices in case the oil runs dry one day,
such
 as solar and wind power. Using knowledge of urban planners and
don
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 not stick to a
fordism
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 culture
,
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 definitely can help us to make pedestrian-friendly cities and apply more limits for fuel vehicles.
For example
, the Netherlands is a good sample for
this
 definition, after world war I
this
 country had really over-growing issues with car pollution and traffic,
however
, they try to use some strategies to overcome their difficulties,
such
 as street pavement, shrinking the width of
route
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, spreading bike lifestyle, etc.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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