Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Even though powerful and wealthy
nations
provide financial aids
to poorer Fix the agreement mistake
aid
countries
, it is not an effective solution to reduce poverty. These rich countries
should often help under developed
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underdeveloped
countries
by
other types of Change preposition
with
support
instead
of providing money. I completely agree with the statement and this
essay will support
my decision.
On one hand, developed nations
can aid other nations
by sharing their technologies and knowledge to solve problems in different industries. To reason that,
agriculture Remove the comma
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considered
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is considered
as
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apply
a
main source of exports in a country, and rich Correct article usage
the
countries
can provide technologies and knowledge to improve the
production. Correct article usage
apply
As a result
, the government can bring more money into the country by exporting goods and stabilising the economy. As an example, recently China provided a set of new fertilizing drones to Bangladesh which increased their vegetable production by 60%. Another option is that
to Correct pronoun usage
apply
support
with
technology in terms of improving Change preposition
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local
healthcare system, which highly affects Add an article
the local
to
the development of a nation. For Change preposition
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an
example,the UK provided MRI scanners to Indonesia to Correct article usage
apply
support
patients, and it led to reduce
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reducing
number
of deaths as it helped to identify diseases early.
Change the article
the number
On the other hand
, rich governments can start joint projects with developing countries
, which benefits for
both parties. In other terms, powerful states can Change preposition
apply
start
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tostart
join
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joining
such
as harbours, airports, railway lines etc. For an instance, Japan joined together with
Sri Lanka to build an airport and an
harbour to facilitate ships and flights which travel across Change the article
a
Indian
ocean. Add an article
the Indian
As a consequence
, Sri Lanka's foreign revenue increased dramatically and Japan saved more than 200 million USD per month which was allocated for their voyagers. In
addition
a large number of job opportunities have opened to Sri Lankan citizens to Add a comma
,addition
support
to solve
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solving
economical
problems within the country.
Replace the word
economic
To conclude
, rich and developed nations
should provide non financial
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non-financial
aids
to poor Fix the agreement mistake
aid
nations
in order to solve poverty. In my opinion, giving solutions to increase the economy is much better than providing money.Submitted by dmdeemanthakasun on
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