The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates the weekly
consumption
of four different types of meat (fish
, lamb
, beef
and chicken
) in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
, lamb
, fish
and beef
consumption
reduced throughout the time period while
chicken
consumption
rose. Besides
, their least favourite of all time was fish
.
To start with, weekly
intake of Correct article usage
the weekly
fish
started at just over 50 grams
and it fluctuated over the period before it reached to
the lowest of roughly 48g in 1999. Change preposition
apply
Then
slowly varied and climbed to roughly 49 grams
. Secondly
, beef
reported
Add a missing verb
was reported
around
220 per person in 1979 which was the most favourite type of meat in 1979. Change preposition
at around
However
, beef
intake fluctuated in the following years and reached a peak of around 245g per week and then
figures declined to reach the lowest of roughly 100 grams
between 1999 and 2004.
On the other hand
, lamb
and chicken
usage began at around 150 grams
in
the beginning of the period. Change the preposition
at
Lamb
witnessed a decrement in the following two and half decades while
experiencing several fluctuations and reached to
60grams approximately. Change preposition
apply
Finally
, the consumption
of chicken
experienced an upward trend and reported the highest of 250g in 2004.Submitted by dmdeemanthakasun on
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