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Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Lack of still
water
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 became one of the greatest global issues in the past few years due the different reasons, but mostly due the overpopulation, even in developed
countries
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. In
past
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the past
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 century number of the
people
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 in the world rapidly increased, so
available
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the available
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 resources of food, but especially
water
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are
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 not enough anymore.
Increase
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 in the global population leads to
the
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higher demands
in
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for
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 different products, which requires
expansion
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the expansion
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 of various
industries
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 and productions that spend
enormous
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an enormous
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amount
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amounts
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 of
water
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 in production processes.
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,
industries
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, mostly those
connectes
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connected
 with large corporations, are the greatest polluters across the world. They
do
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massive
pollution
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 of
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
 with all
kind
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kinds
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 of pollutants,
such
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 as
microplastic
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microplastics
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, medicines and chemicals, that makes
water
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 sources even more restricted.
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 large
corporation
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corporations
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are
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is
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 the most responsible for huge
water
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 wastage and
pollution
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,
people
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 do not pay enough attention
on
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to
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 things that they can do to mitigate
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this
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these
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 issues in their households, so
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, for instance,
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for instance
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the
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apply
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most
of
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people
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 overuse plastic, use non
enviromental
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environmental
environmentally
 friendly cleaning products and do not recycle waste. Poor and developing
countries
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 are suffering because of these issues for a long time, but recently even developed
countries
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 started to feel the effects of
this
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 problem, so governments should urgently take measures to prevent more damage.
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, opening
recycle
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recycling
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 plants to reduce
pollution
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 and obligating
industries
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 to decrease
usage
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the usage
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 of toxic
materias
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materials
 by raising taxes on the products that are highly toxic would significantly contribute to preserving
of
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apply
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water
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 resources. There are
few
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a few
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 positive examples in some
countries
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 that managed to reduce
amount
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the amount
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 of toxic gases from
industiries
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industries
 that could be used as a model in these cases too.
Except
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that
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, raising
awarness
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awareness
 among the
people
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 would
enourage
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encourage
 them to contribute as much as they can from their homes. In conclusion, lack of
water
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 is
great
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a great
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 global issue
due to
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 the unresponsible consumption and
pollution
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 that could be mitigated if governments
encourge
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encourage
industries
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 to reduce
pollution
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 and raise
awarness
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awareness
 among
population
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the population
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 regarding
this
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 issue.
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