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Children learn best by observing behavior of adults and copying it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is true that offspring adopt most of their habits from what they observe on daily basis from their elders and try to print it. I totally agree with
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 the conclusion. To start with, Kids learn so much from what they watch their
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 or others around them doing. It is often said that
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fast learners and they learn what is going around them.
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, I have seen so many youngsters speaking bad words to their
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 and others which they have heard earlier from
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 saying to others.
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, little
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 learn so many life experiences from their guardians like managing their home and job together.
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, I have seen my cousin doing household chores like my aunt.
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, juveniles have a very sharp memory to acquire knowledge through observing and which stay with them throughout their life. So, it is very important for
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watch what
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 gaze at because it remains forever in their minds.
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, Social media has a flood of content which inappropriate things like porn and illegal sites for youngsters which can spoil their innocence
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 early age. It can be concluded that
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fast learners and learn their look people around them. So, it is very for their elders to build a peaceful and respectful atmosphere so that
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 can see and print good things.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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