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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

#future #cars #buses #trucks #driverless #people #vehicles #passengers
Some opinions believe that three kinds of transportation namely cars , buses and trucks are being considered to become what do not need
controller
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 during moving time and passenger is the only one will appear in these . From my point of view , I would accept that benefits are more than drawbacks Discussing
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positive aspects , it is obvious that the biggest reason
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 driverless could bring advantages to
people
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as well as
 convenience .
While
other vehicle
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another vehicle
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,
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the driver
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driver
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drivers
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 have to use physical health and concentration during
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 process . Unless controllers focus intensively on driving and getting over
sleepy
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 state , accidents will
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 extremely and that result in
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 for others . But cars , buses and trucks ,
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do not need
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the requirement
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 of
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a driver
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 and depend on automatic which
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 designed through artificial intelligence . It becomes the main driver and all
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movements
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 is reliance on itself . So that will not only help passengers avoid
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positive problems that always
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in
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road
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 like driving
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 maximum speed but
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 the reduction of accidents . But there is a significant issue with using automatic
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 which can cause remarkably to residents .
People
 could not assume that everything is possible , it usually includes negative faces with
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a citizen
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 who looks
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 like a part of life like
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 of driving
as well as
 direction . If
people
 are not aware of these errors to make any decision , it is
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actually unfortunate thing for passengers and others around . But in the circumstances ,
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 knows how to fix and take care
carefully
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 , these automatic products will carry many safeties throughout travelling Despite the fact that driverless items have both
advantage
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 and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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,
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 my
experiences
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,
people
 ought to consider and
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identify
 which is possible and safest for
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 to own .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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