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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The
book
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bookstore
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store
 maps illustrate the revolution in 2000 and
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the currently
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currently
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current
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 map.
Overall
, it is clearly observed that in 2000, the amount of
fiction
 sector
occupied
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was occupied
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 by the vast majority
in
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of
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 the
store
 and followed by non-
fiction
 and other categories.
Whereas
, presently, the
fiction
area
 had reduced
in
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to
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the
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a
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 small part of the
store
 and install a new cafe
area
 as the main part of
its
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it
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. Starting
with in
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within
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 2000, the
fiction
 genre accounted for
the
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a
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 large percentage of the book
store
was
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located in the north and north-east
area
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areas
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, and
non-
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the non-fiction
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fiction
 sector was in the south of the space, and opposite with
the
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apply
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non-
fiction
 are various types of
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the book
a book
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book
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books
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such
 as art, hobbies, and cookery.
Moreover
, the service desk, new books,
travel
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and travel
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 all
was
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were
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 located
in
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to
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 the west of the entrance. With regard to recently's renovation,
due to
 the new
area
 call cafe has added into the
store
 as the main proportion of the
store
 in the centre with three tables. The travel, new books, and service desk
is
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remain in the same position.
While
 the
fiction
area
 is replaced by art, hobbies, and cookery in the north and some non-
fiction
 is moved to the
north east
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northeast
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area
instead
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words store, fiction, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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