Some people believe that it is better to get advice from old people compared to young people. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

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so he was available to give their point of view about what to do and how

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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356 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

life experience
practical solutions
broader perspective
wisdom
long-term consequences
foresight
limited life experience
contemporary issues
rapidly evolving world
innovative solutions
modern thinking
fresh ideas
timeless wisdom
combination of advice
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