Some people believe that it is better to get advice from old people compared to young people. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

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advice
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more benefits
such
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you from the
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experience
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learnt
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through
the years.
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experiences
also
they had
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learnt
from their mistakes made in
life
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advice
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you from
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knowledged
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knowledge
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point of view.
for
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if
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want to start a new business
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shop. Is way better
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adviced
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advice
advised
from
people
older rather than
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young
people
. because they already had lived that
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experience
and they could
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you about their mistakes through their path on the
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business
avoiding
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the same.
Secondly
, they already have been in the world for a
while
so their understanding
about
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how the world works is better than young
people
. Having
an
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stronger opinion based on
life
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experiences
experience
.
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, they had
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many
thing
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things
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and
experinced
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experienced
experience
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along
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their
life
.
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example
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if you want to get
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advice
about
surf
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surfing
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elders will
advice
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you from their
expirinces
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experiences
experience
giving you
different
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a different
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point of view than young
people
.
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instance
mistake
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that they have made like
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a small surfboard for big waves or getting out from an
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appropriate
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up in an accident. because
that
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experinced lerned
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experience learned
through the years they can give you better
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advice
pieces of advice
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. In my
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opinion
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there is
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best
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the best
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advice
that
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advice
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coming
from an older person,
such
a
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granfather
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grandfather
. someone
how
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who
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has lived plenty of
expirences
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experiences
experience
and has been
expouse
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exposed
to many different
situation
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situations
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.
For example
, at the moment of
inmigrating
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immigrating
in migrating
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my
granfather adviced
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grandfather advised
me. because he had
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immigrated
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from
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to
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so he was available to give their point of view about what to do and how
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approach
different
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situation
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being
to prepared
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not
get
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surpprised
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surprised
by anything.
to conclude
elders could
advice
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advise
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you
from
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about
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their
life
expirences
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experiences
through the years like travel
expirences
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experiences
or
a simple
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simple advice
a piece of simple advice
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advice
about surf. As well,
from
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mistakes that
their
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there
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have made in
busisness
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business
to avoid
commit
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them again.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life experience
  • practical solutions
  • broader perspective
  • wisdom
  • long-term consequences
  • foresight
  • limited life experience
  • contemporary issues
  • rapidly evolving world
  • innovative solutions
  • modern thinking
  • fresh ideas
  • timeless wisdom
  • combination of advice
  • merges experience with contemporary insight
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