Some people think that good teamwork makes a company successful, others think that good leadership is the reason behind the success of a company. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Many nations argue that good
teamwork
makes a
company
successful,
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while
other
individuals
consider that good
leadership
can lead to
success
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of a
company
. In my opinion both of them
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for the
company
. On the one hand, good
teamwork
is good for a
company
. When employees
has
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good
teamwork
the
company
's
work
productivity will be increasing.
However
, it has benefits for the employees.
Firstly
their salary will
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.
Secondly
, it would be easier to
work
there because if people
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the
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work
their team workers can help
to
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them.
For example
by the magazine called "
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individuals
can know that 83% of
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achieve success by helping
teamwork
.
On the other hand
, good
leadership
also
has benefits for the
company
. It would be better for the
company
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if people possess
to
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good
leadership
skills
.
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it would be better for
individuals
too.
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magazine
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called "Times" people can know that in corporations where leaders
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good
leadership
skills
quality of
work
is better. the Clear vision is that
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employees can be free with
individuals
who
has
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good
leadership
skills
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example, they
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can ask to leave
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their
work
earlier if they
are have
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some problems or plans. Taking everything into consideration, I consider that
company
can achieve
to
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success more
effective
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by having good
teamwork
and
leadership
skills
.
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