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People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #st #century #life #quality #times
Now in the
21st century
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21st-century
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individuals
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individuals'
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life style
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lifestyle
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 is better than nations who lived ages ago. I
am partly agree
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partly agree
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 with
this
 idea of statement. On the one, it is true that now nations lead
better
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a better
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 quality of
life
. As technology
improving
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 day by day
life
 became easier than past
by
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with
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 their
helping
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help
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.
For example
, in the past
people
washing
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washed
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 their clothes nearby river on the stone, but when it comes
today
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to day
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 individuals just put their clothes
on
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in
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 the washing machine and complete their work without difficulties.
On the other hand
, quality of
life
 was better in the past. In the
past
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 the quality of
life
 was better without factories which is producing harmful elements.
Clear
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 vision is that
,
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apply
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 in the past air was clean and
people
 live longer because there
was
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were
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not
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no
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 factories and there is
not
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no
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opportunity
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an opportunity
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 for launching
rocket
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a rocket
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.
However
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form
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from
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 the magazine called "Times" individuals can know that
in
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on
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 average
people
 live more than 80 years because of fresh air. Taking everything into consideration, I
am partly agree
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partly agree
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 that now
people
life style
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lifestyle
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 is better than past.
However
, there
is
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are
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 a lot of positive sides
of
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to
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life
 in the past.
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