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Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking education and constantly facing pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#students #work #results #education #pressure
These days
students
 face a lot of
pressure
. That intense
pressure
 appears when
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young adults start to mix
studies
 with
work
.
This
 often leads
students
 to not full commitment
of
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 their
studies
, which
at
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in
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 their case is one of the most important activities. The question is why does the mixture between
work
 and studying creates
pressure
 for a student and is there any solutions
how
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 the
students
 could avoid being under the
pressure
? First and most importantly we need
face
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 the fact that
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students
 these days are growing up in a vastly developing environment with
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huge competition
to
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for
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 future possibilities. Many young
students
 want
to begin
 their adult life and start making money as early as possible, so they could support themselves. That leads them to
finding
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 a job or
a
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part-time
work
 where they could begin collecting their real-life
practise
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.
However
, introducing new important activities during the study period
take
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 a lot of
students
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students'
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 abilities to fully concentrate on
the
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studies
.
Which
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 means that the person needs to concentrate the mind on
work
 and
learning
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the learning
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 process at the same time.
This
 intense schedule
begin
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 to rise
pressure
for
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young adult. They lose the site of the main objective, which in their case
is
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studies
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studies
 and
therefore
focuses
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 more on the
work
.
This
 often causes the
students
 in lacking
of
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the education that they should have gained during their
studies
. I think the solution could be simple to
this
 problem.
Students
 should be thought that there is no necessary need to jump
in to
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the
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working life. During the study
period
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 they should fully concentrate on the things that they are taught. The jobs should be considered only
then
,
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 when they feel that the study process is quite easy for them and they are able to do both things at the same time. Without interrupting the studying process and having their education as the priority.
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