People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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At the moment families currently have children
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mentality is in Western states, and in the eastern part,
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have children at an early age.On the one
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I agree and
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I do not and I would like to write
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in my essay. I want to start by saying that I agree with
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because women and men will be ready for a child both psychologically and financially.
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they study at the university for four years
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go to the magistracy and
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work in their
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for several years and after
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they will be ready to create
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and have a baby.Another advantage is
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before creating a family and having a child
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first meet for a long time study each other for a long time and
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build a family.
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, the average age for marriage in America is 30, in Sweden 32, and in Italy and Spain 36. Would like to move on to the disadvantages of
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question.One of the main disadvantages of having children is health problems. After childbirth, older women develop diseases
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as constant headaches, falling hair and nails, joint pain, depression and being overweight.
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of
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health problems. In the end, I wanted to say that there are some pros and cons to having a child at an older age. All
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world have their own plans for the future. Listen to your heart.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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