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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life? Exam pattern and teaching methods

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the plane illustrates a public park and the differences that
occer
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occur
 to it since it opens in 1920 and now.
overall
,
their
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there
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 are many changes and updates
such
 as the fountain
has
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have
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 been converted into a rose garden ,
while
 the rose garden in 1920 has been converted into a cafe.
to begin
 ,
their
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there
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 are three rose
garden
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gardens
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 in 1920 ,but nowadays only two remain ,
whereas
 one of them has been placed in the centre of the park
surownded
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surrounded
 by seats .
addetionally
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Additionally
, the stage for the musicians was updated to
amphitheatre
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an amphitheatre
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 for concerts .
Furthermore
, there was a glasshouse that has been changed into a water feature .
although
 there was a pond for
irregating
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irrigating
irrigation
 the plants ,it has been converted
to
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children's
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a children's
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 play area.
however
, the
enterances
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entrances
have
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apply
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remain
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remained
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 the same , and a new one has been added ,which
link
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links
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 to the underground car park.
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