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Many people rely on news reporting to their information. However some think that the journalists cannot be trusted. Do you agree or disagree and what qualities should a journalist have?

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 agree journalists cannot be trusted. To commence with ,why
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 are multiple reasons for that notion.
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reporters
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 are present outside the hotel in order to provide more and more
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Although
 these days we get enormous options to collect
news
 like social media but traditional
reporters
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also
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, some
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journalists because of dirty politics
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politicians
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 large businessmen.they provide funding to
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 for purpose of making fake
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 some of their illegal works.
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reporters
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 so
people
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 of activities and grant hard punishment to criminals. In
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 reports in some way cheat
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people
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strict rules for journalists helps to clean the system since they play
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 life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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