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In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is it a positive or negative development?

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The
internet
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 has become a vital part
in
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 human life and it has been used for many purposes like
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a job
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job
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jobs
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 and other things .
This
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internet
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the internet
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 and provide a suitable conclusion. On the one hand , there are several advantages
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Firstly
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 , it helps
people
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 to keep in touch with their
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 ones . As we can see that in the past it was hard for
people
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 to communicate with each other
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if they were in different places .
However
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 , today with the advent of the
internet
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 , it has become easy to communicate with other individuals.
For example
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 , there are many applications like WhatsApp and Facebook ; which assist
people
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 to contact
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their friends and families .
In addition
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 , the
internet
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also
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helping
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people
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 in their education and job purposes . Most employees nowadays are doing their work in their comfort zones and the same can be seen for students too.
For instance
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, during
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the pandemic
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pandemic
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 most entrepreneurs conducted most of their
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presentations
 through applications like zoom so that they can do their work without any difficulties .
On the other hand
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 , there are some drawbacks too. The
internet
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 is
virtual
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the virtual
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 world so it is a good opportunity for criminals to commit crimes
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 the
internet
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 . We can see that
,
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most
people
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 today use the
internet
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 for banking and other purposes
therefore
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, it has become easy for criminals like hackers to perpetrate cyber crimes.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, by using the
internet
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people
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also
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isolating
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 in the virtual world and
thus
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 ,
effecting
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their social and locomotive skills which helps them to be active and healthy in their life . So as
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 they are becoming unhealthy and inactive in their lives .
To conclude
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 , it is obvious that the
internet
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have
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 so many disadvantages .
However
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 , I think that it is more beneficial for
people
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 because it is helping
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individuals in all
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parts
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 of their life.
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