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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Fairmont Island. Summerise the information and make comparisons when necessary.

The pie charts presented, demonstrate the benefits and drawbacks of Fairmont island. Roughly under half of the visitors found the high cost of living to be an unpleasant factor
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 about a third agreed on the shortcomings of entertainment. In spite of these, the weather came in third as the most common downside as a fifth of the visitors expressed dissatisfaction. Surprisingly, only 5% found the food to be of poor quality.
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, the habitants of
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 island seem to be hospitable given that more than a third considered the people to be of the perks.
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, 37% of the reported survey takers, brought the scenery to second place. Culture and good accommodation were deemed 3rd and 4th respectively, with a slight difference in percentage. All in all, the habitants seem to make up for the disheartening cost of living
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 the scenery could win over the lack of entertainment by 7%.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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