the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.

The chart illustrates the volume of the country's exports in different product types from 2015 to 2016 and the units were measured in billions. The table displays changing

proportion

Fix the agreement mistake

proportions

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in each product category between 2015 and 2016.

Overall

, the tendency in every category of export experienced an upward trend over the period of time except in gems and jewellery.

However

, petroleum goods accounted for the highest in

this

country. Regarding the chart, petroleum is the most exported, it was nearly 60

billion

and gradually increased by 3% to approximately 63

billion

in 2016.

Nevertheless

, even though textiles had the least amount in both years, they have changed the most, around 26

billion

in 2015 and sharply rose 15.24% to almost 31

billion

in 2016.

On the other hand

, Agricultural exports were around 31

billion

in 2015 and steadily went up 0.18% in 2016.

Moreover

, gems and jewellery were the only goods which experienced a downward trend, it was nearly 43

billion

in 2015 and dropped 5.18% to approximately 41

billion

in 2016.

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the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.

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