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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The two diagrams compare the layout of a
school
 in 2004 with the changes planned for 2024. We can see that the new
school
 site involves making a number of changes, mainly the construction of a new
school
 building and a second car park. There are no plans to change the main entrance or the two current
school
 buildings. The most noticeable change from the layout in 2004 to the proposed
school
 plan is that the sports field will be removed and the current space will be used for a new
school
 building. Part of the nearby greenery will be removed and a new parking area and sports field will be built.
In addition
, a corridor is about to be built between the two existing
school
 buildings. There is no longer a direct path from the main entrance to the sports field.
However
, a new road for people to drive their cars from the entrance to the new parking area will be built. In comparison to 2004, the
school
 will have the capacity for 1,000 students to study there in 2024, with an increase of 400 students
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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