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Modern technology is now very common in most workplaces. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

#technology #workplaces #work
These days modern
technology
 is becoming very popular and usage of
technology
 has improved in workplaces. I strongly believe that
technology
 has eased the jobs,
it
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but it
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 certainly
some
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has some
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 negative impacts too. There is no doubt that
technology
 has facilitated work and made it
favorable
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favourable
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.
Majority
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The majority
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 of companies are using
for
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it for
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 doing their activities more quickly and simply rather than wasting time,
it
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which
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 means that
technology
 helps to manage time.
For instance
, nowadays creators are creating
new
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version
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versions
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 of computers
due to
lack
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a lack
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 of convenience. Computers help to make routine activities easier ,
such
 as
make
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making
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 a list,
make
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making
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 a report, account
a
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money,
however
, in the past, companies used to keep paper notes and
it
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which
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 can be lost and it is challenging to save for a long time.
Moreover
, modern
technology
 helps to work
in
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over
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 long distances,
for example
, when people go on a trip or they feel sick , despite
of
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apply
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this
 they can rely on technological innovations.
On the other hand
, when
technology
become
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becomes
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common
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a common
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 thing in human life myriad of people lose their jobs and it leads to a huge rise
of
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in
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 unemployment and
also
it
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apply
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increased responsibility for
government
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the government
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.
Furthermore
,modern
technology
 cause to
becoming
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become
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laziness person and it leads to reduce imagination and intellect despite of
this
 it can affect on brain system.
In addition
 to
this
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 it is hard to focus on their work because different kind of messages or social media and
they
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can distract people.
To sum up
, technical innovations are improving, they change our daily life in workplaces and
also
this
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 things help to tackle problems which is including working methods.
However
, it can influence some aspects and make some drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • software applications
  • high-speed internet
  • communication
  • collaboration
  • geographical boundaries
  • remote work
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • skill gaps
  • job displacement
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence
  • dependency
  • security risks
  • data breaches
  • cyber attacks
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