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In some countries, people live with their parents and siblings until their old age. Do you think there are more advantages or disadvantages to this behaviour? Discuss your opinion and provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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It is considered normal in some countries to live with
parents
 and siblings for the most part of
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life. I do not support
this
 idea because it not only makes relationships with
parents
 worse
,
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 but
also
 creates a great
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 of issues in one’s marriage. Living in a parental home may seem an excellent idea at
first,
but in reality the atmosphere there is frequently tense and nervous.
Parents
 are used to the role of rulers and tend to keep
this
 position no matter how old their child is,
whereas
 children grow up and want their opinion to be considered.
As a result
, lots of disagreements take place, which
worsen
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 the microclimate at home.
For example
, most of those who moved out of their
parents’
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 house agree that their connection with
parents
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 stepped to the next level as they have
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 reasons to conflict. Another challenge is to create a new family inside one’s own. If a person gets married and decides to live with
parents
 or in-laws, they should not only get used to the lack of privacy, but
also
 to the constant interference in personal matters.
For instance
, when a couple has a quarrel, there always are witnesses around giving “valuable” advice. The case gets even more complicated when a baby is born. Young
parents
 have to guard their upbringing ideas as they are often criticized by the older generation.
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a
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conclusion,
while
 living with
parents
 and siblings may be comforting, most of the time it makes family members disconnected and unable to create a household they truly need.
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