Shops should not allowed to sell any food and drinks that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The commercial store needs to stop selling edible
products
that consist of chemicals that will harm individuals' health. This
essay is totally agreed to ban or not allowing
shops to sell Wrong verb form
allow
food
and drink products
that are not good for people
's health, by doing that we can avoid the sickness caused by chemicals. In addition
, it will help society to have a healthy lifestyle and improve individuals' productivity.
There are some food
and drink products
that are mouth-watery and eye-appealing to the public, ,
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apply
however
these can cause sickness. Add a comma
,however
such
as diabetes and colon cancer by consuming lots of junk foods and sugary sodas. For ,example study has proven that eating often instant noodles can affects
Wrong verb form
affect
people
's intestines that
cause cancer. In ,addition drinking soda Correct pronoun usage
which
products
leads to high sugar and jeopardize human.
By avoiding selling those products
people
's lifestyles will be able to change from being unhealthy to becoming healthy well being and productivity will improve. People
will encourage to eat and drink healthy products
such
as fresh juices, vegetables and fruits. Furthermore
, the family may have more bonding time by eating at home cooked by their parents. For example
, in Japan people
don't often eat in restaurants rather they are focusing on homemade food
and cooked their own food
at home and shared it together.
In conclusion, banning to sale
of Add an article
the sale
food
and drinks
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drink
products
that can cause harm to people
's health and focusing rather on society's healthy lifestyle is most important. Furthermore
, practising cooking at home has a lot
effects not only on a healthy body but Add the preposition
oflot
also
on a healthy mind, not only for yourself but for the people
around you.Submitted by miemieperez on
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