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The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The provided two pie graphs demonstrate the proportion of males and females who are either employed or self-employed the results are three Manual and three Non-Manual, sex and occupation from the
year
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 1992.
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, It can be clearly seen that the highest of
men
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 and
women
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 was an increase of 36% with 29% by Managerial and professional in the
year
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 1992. On contrary, General labourers was holding a minor portion with 2% and 1% in the
year
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 1992. The higher of
men
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 was occupied by six twentieth portion within 26% and the lowest of
women
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 was the seven twentieth portion within 27% from other manuals.
Women
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 were about 31% more considerable by one-thirtieth fraction than
men
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 were about 6% a tiny by the sixth fraction from Clerical or related in the proportion. The other non-manual was the ninth of
women
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 and the sixth of
men
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 in the fraction. In conclusion, the two pie graphs indicate employees and self-employed of sex and occupation
year
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 1992 duration what is managerial and professional overwhelming,
furthermore
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, manual are both craft or similar and other manuals significant.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment patterns
  • unemployment
  • sector
  • distribution
  • comparison
  • percentage
  • manufacturing
  • services
  • full-time
  • part-time
  • Great Britain
  • demographics
  • workforce
  • labor market
  • 1992
  • data representation
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