The pie chart shows change sin 4 employment sector in two towns.
The two pie charts show employment in manufacturing, hospitality, engineering, and teaching in two towns in the years 2009 and 2020.
Overall
, it is clear that
there was a significant increase in the number of people
employed in the manufacturing sector
while
in town B, fewer people
were employed in the same sector
.
In town A, the number of people
employed in the manufacturing sector
in 2009 was 20%, which became tripled in 2020, accounting for 60%. Hospitality experienced a mere difference of only 4% in 2020. Meanwhile, the engineering sector
accounted for 60% of employed people
, but this
figure observed a huge fall by 2020, standing at 17%. However
, the teaching sector
did not change much.
In regard to town B, 2/5 people
had been employed in manufacturing, which declined to a quarter in 2020. However
, the proportion of people
in
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was
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However
, the ratio remained stable for engineering at 35% in both years. While
the percentage of people
employed in hospitality increased by 5% after 11 years.Submitted by kaur.gurbhage on
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