You have a problem with the computer at the office which has affected your work Write a letter to your manager and say What problem do you have What difficulties does this create for you What could be done about it

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Rubenel and my employee ID is 1234567. I am writing

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letter t let you know about my

problem

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. My computer at the office is

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damaged

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damage

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damaged

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, I cannot open it and

and

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the

ths

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the

screen

get

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blank and very slow to load. I already try to

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the

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on my own, and

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cannot fix the

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. I already inform

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IT technical support about it and already

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informed

my team leader. Let me explain the

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I encounter

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when

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open

mycomputer

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my computer

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work

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really well, but after 5 minutes the screen suddenly

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blank and the system

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up.

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meso

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much

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and

reaaly

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really

affected my work.

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the

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is my computer cannot connect to the internet sometimes. Hope, you address

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issue as soon as possible

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because

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progress. Thanking you. Sincerely yours, Rubenel

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

157 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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