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You have a problem with the computer at the office which has affected your work Write a letter to your manager and say What problem do you have What difficulties does this create for you What could be done about it

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Rubenel and my employee ID is 1234567. I am writing
this
 letter t let you know about my
problem
. My computer at the office is
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, I cannot open it and
and
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the
ths
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the
 screen
get
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 blank and very slow to load. I already try to
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 the
problem
 on my own, and
i
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 cannot fix the
problem
. I already inform
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IT technical support about it and already
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informed
 my team leader. Let me explain the
problem
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,
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 when
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 open
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my computer
 its
work
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 really well, but after 5 minutes the screen suddenly
get
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 blank and the system
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 up.
It's causes
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meso
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me
much
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problem
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really
 affected my work.
In addition
also
to
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the
problem
 is my computer cannot connect to the internet sometimes. Hope, you address
this
 issue as soon as possible
beacause
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because
 it will affect our work and our
company
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 progress. Thanking you. Sincerely yours, Rubenel
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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