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Some people say that the educational success of a student is the result of the work of a good teacher. Others say it depends on the character of the student. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A highly controversial issue today relates to whether a student’s academic
success
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 depends on the guidance of a
teacher
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 or not. As far as I am concerned,
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 the role of a talented
teacher
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 is partially important, personal effort is essential for being an outstanding student. On the one hand, many people, especially
parents
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, believe that excellent academic lectures or instructors are crucial for their children to be educated because most students can be encouraged to study only by their admired teachers, not by their
parents
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.
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, in a survey by the Myanmar government in 2019, 75% of
parents
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 wanted their children to study in private schools where there are an enormous amount of teachers and trainers observing the students all day rather than in government schools. It means that most
parents
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 tend to rely on teachers for their children’s educational
success
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.
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, others believe that who determines
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 is the student himself. I firmly agree with
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 belief because even an excellent
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 cannot help a lazy student achieve the highest scores. It only depends on the learner’s dedication to particular subjects.
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, a
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 generally teaches thirty pupils in a class equally, but only a few become outstanding.
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 is because individual efforts are more important than a
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’s instructions.
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,
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 it is not deniable that the guidance of an excellent
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 is partially necessary, individual dedications and personal efforts are essential for a student’s academic
success
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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