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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
points
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 earned by three different
teams
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,
teams
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 A,
B
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 and C, in four consecutive seasons from 2002 to 2005. It is evident that
team
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B
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 scored by far the most in every season,
while
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team
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 A got minor
points
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 in total. In 2002,
while
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team
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B
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 scored 82
points
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, the highest of all time in 4 seasons,
teams
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 A and C got only a few
points
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 (5 and 10, respectively). The
score
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 of
team
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B
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 fell to 60 in 2003, and
teams
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 A and C experienced a tiny increase,
although
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 they remained far lower than
team
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B
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. There was significant growth in
team
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 A’s
score
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 in 2004, to 35
points
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, seven times higher than in 2002.
On the other hand
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,
team
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B
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’s
score
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 again noticeably decreased by 17
points
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 at the same time,
whereas
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team
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 C’s
score
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 marginally fell by 3
points
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.
However
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, the season of 2005 was a turnover, when
team
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B
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’s
score
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 rocketed to 55
points
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,
team
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 A’s
score
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 markedly fell back to 8
points
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, and
team
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 C’s
score
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 declined to 5. Anyhow,
team
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B
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 got by far the most
points
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 among the three
teams
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 in every season.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words points, teams, b, team, score with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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