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The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005.

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The graphs compare the
value
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 of three selected exports and the total
value
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 of
goods
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 , which were measured in
million
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dollars
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 , over a 6-year time period from 2000 to 2005 . In general , the total
value
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 of
fuel
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 exports increased significantly after 2002.
Whereas
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 , the second line graph depicts ,
increase
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an increase
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for
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in
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 manufactured
goods
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 and for
other
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the other
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 two categories ; it reported
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decrease and
stable
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 throughout the year. To be specific,
fuel
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 was the item that was exported the most in 2000 and it accounted for 45000
million
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dollars
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.
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 , the other two
goods
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 made up around 18000
million
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dollars
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 in that year .
However
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 , after 3 years the rate of
fuel
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 in the country decreased dramatically and it continued until 2005 and reached 20000
million
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dollars
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 .
While
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 for manufactured
goods
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 the
value
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 increased moderately and reported 220000
million
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dollars
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 in the final year .
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 , for food ,items it remained stable and it
finally
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 constituted 50000
million
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dollars
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 in 2005. Meanwhile , the total
value
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 of
fuel
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 exports in 2000 was 300000
million
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dollars
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 .
However
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 , after the past 3 years , it reported a drastic fall in its rating . But in following years it rose significantly and reached a peak of 440000
million
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dollars
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 in 2005

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, goods, million, dollars, fuel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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