Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Improving public
health
is a complicated issue in society
for last
five decades and it is said that Correct article usage
the last
sport
facilities Change the noun form
sports
is
the best way to keep Change the verb form
are
in
fit. Change preposition
apply
However
, others believe that people
strain from workout and give upCorrect pronoun usage
apply
it
, and they suggest using other Change preposition
on it
methods
of developing society
Change noun form
society's
health
. Personally, I believe that other methods
are more efficient. So this
essay has tried to cover both of mentioned views and then
will suggest one of the best strategies to increase active
lifestyle in public.
Nowadays, Add an article
the active
it is clear that
increasing athletic fields is improving public health
. However
, we cannot force society
to go there and keep in
fit. Indeed, I do not mean that Change preposition
apply
this
will not work, sport
facilities encourage Change the noun form
sports
people
to do
exercise often. Unnecessary verb
apply
For instance
, person
, who is walking through ballparks, cannot hold back and play football or basketball. So, he/she Correct article usage
a person
stay
fit. Correct subject-verb agreement
stays
Nevertheless
, other measures should be too discussed.
On the other hand
, some people
suggest using other methods
to increase public health
. One of these methods
is to educate people
to
Change preposition
about
healthier
Add an article
a healthier
lifestyle
Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
by
daily tasks. Change preposition
through
For example
, society
always sees something in advertisements, and sometimes wants to buy
. Correct pronoun usage
itbuy
Therefore
, we can construct Correct article usage
a sport
sport
regime of Change the noun form
sports
community
and Correct article usage
the community
sport
will be their pursuit. Moreover
, incentives are great motivators for people
. It means,
ministers should organize marathons, Remove the comma
apply
competitions
and give financial rewards as a prize.
In conclusion, nowadays, Correct word choice
and competitions
sport
facilities become a place where no one plays, and Change the noun form
sports
people
have started to miss ballparks. So, government
should undertake other measures to improve Add an article
the government
fitness
level of humanity and I believe that they can launch something efficient for everyone.Add an article
the fitness
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